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    2. [TEA-GEA] ESLDO, English as a Second Language, ESL Level 4 by Ms. C. Wang (2023-2024)
    3. Lesson 4.5 - Revising and Finalizing

    Lesson 4.5 - Revising and Finalizing

    • Lesson 4.5 - Revising and Finalizing

      Lesson 4.5 - Revising and Finalizing

      Learning Goals: By the end of this lesson students will be able to know how to edit their essay to eliminate repetitive words & replace them with more descriptive words & verbs. They will also put the story into a proper structure to show how the main characters build the plot & resolve conflicts.

      Limit to 5 maximum.

      Success Criteria: By the end of this lesson students will be able to revise their short story & analyze a short story in order to practice their reading & writing skills.

      Limit to 5 maximum.

      Each lesson must include at least the following (these go between glossary and Discussion forum)

      -  (10-15 minutes Lecture Segment follow by 20-30 minutes activity) x 3

      - Lesson Assignment/Homework (FOR and/or AS)

      and the following


      •  TODAY'S SCHEDULE Folder

        (8:00 pm - 9:30 pm)

        • Announcements: Unit 3 Graded Assignments, Rough Draft Assignment Review, End of Term next Friday, Dec. 17, 2021 (Last day for Unit 3/4 assignments is Monday, Dec. 13, 2021
        • Icebreaker: How was the short story you are reiewing? + Check-ins on Short story revising
        • Group Activity: Key Elements of a Short Story - Story Pass
        • Reading: Rough Draft Example
        • Video: Editing Tips
        • Lecture: Finalized Example
        • Forum: Giving Feedback - Two Stars and a Wish
        • (9:30 pm - 9:45 pm)
        • BREAK

        (9:45 pm - 11:15 pm)

        • Work Period: Finish 2nd Rough Draft & Teacher-Student story check-up, Finalized Short Story
        • Wrap-Up Announcements: Unit 3 Graded Assignments, Rough Draft Assignment Review, End of Term
        • Exit Card


      • "Remember to spell check!"

      •  Icebreaker: How do you like story writing? Which type of short stories do you enjoy reading? Folder
      •  Group Activity: Key Elements of a Short Story - Story Pass Forum

        We will be working together as a class to create another short story. However, THIS TIME we will be writing down our contributions one at a time and posting to the forum. 

        The Story Pass Game: 

        1. Mr. B will begin a story by writing the words, "Once upon a time...". Mr. B will introduce the setting and some of the main characters. 
        2. After Mr. B has posted his sentences to the forum, the next person will take over and continue the story.
        3. This is repeated until everyone has had a turn to tell a portion of the story. 
        4. The last person will need to find a way to conclude the story. Once they have said a few sentences, they will pronounce, “THE END!”
        You will each be responsible for certain parts of the plot. Please post to the forum one at a time. Here is the order we will be writing in:

        • Mr. B  -  will introduce the main characters - Jody, his sister, & a flying horse Serena 

      •  Reading: Rough Draft Example Poodll ReadAloud
      •  Video: Editing Tips Folder

           


        https://www.grammarly.com

        https://www.grammarcheck.net/editor/

        https://virtualwritingtutor.com

      •  Lecture: Finalized Example Folder
      •  Online Canadian & International Short Stories File
      •  Lesson 4-5 Revising and Finalizing the Short Story File
      •  Exit Card 4-2-2 Assignment
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